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From: "D. J. Blackwood" <djblackwood@attcanada.net>
To: "Keld Jxrn Simonsen" <keld@dkuug.dk>
Cc: "ISO 14766 Mailing List" <iso14766@dkuug.dk>
Subject: RE: (iso14766.40) Comments on 14766 WD4
Date: Sun, 27 Aug 2000 21:44:18 -0400
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This is not entirely an ISO document, it is also an IEEE document and
should follow the same conventions as other IEEE profile documents.  I
don't accept "required by ISO" as a valid reason for not making these
changes.

Dave
--
D. J. Blackwood

> -----Original Message-----
> From: keld@dkuug.dk [mailto:keld@dkuug.dk]On Behalf Of D. J. Blackwood
> Sent: July 26, 2000 15:14
> To: Keld Jxrn Simonsen
> Cc: ISO 14766 Mailing List
> Subject: (iso14766.40) Comments on 14766 WD4
>
>
> > The following, primarily editorial comments are offered on
> the 14766 WD4 as
> > distributed July 24, 2000 in PDF format:
> >
> > Rename section 1 "Overview" and move existing text to a new
> section "1.1
> > Scope".  Additional text (essentially an executive summary)
> may be added to
> > a future section 1.2.  In the absence of this text leave
> 2.2 out of the
> > document for now.
>
> The current clause names are required by ISO, and cannot be changed.
> However, some of the text can be added to the introduction clause,
> when that is provided.
>
> > Merge sections 2 and 3 into a single section 2 titled
> "General" and renumber
> > all subsequent sections and related cross-references.
>
> Clause 2 and 3 are also standard ISO clauses, and they cannot
> be changed.
>
> > Move section 3 "References" to section "2.1 Normative References".
>
> The technical report is not normative, and cannot contain normative
> references. It is a guide.
>
> > On page 4, renumber and rename section 2 "Conformance and
> testing" to be
> > "2.2 Conformance" and replace the first paragraph and the
> Editor's note with
> > the following:
> >
> > "In accordance with the precedent of ISO/IEC 14252: 1995
> (*) , it is not
> > appropriate to claim conformance to this Technical Report because it
> > contains no mandatory requirements. Thus conformance testing to this
> > Technical Report is not applicable."
>
> OK
>
> > and add the footnote:
> >
> > "(*) For information on references, see 3."
> >
> > The asterisk (*) should be replaced by the appropriate
> footnote number.
>
> Why do we need a footnote here? This is not normal way in an ISO
> document to reference other standards. The normal practise is just to
> write the name of the standard, and then you go to the references
> if you want the full title etc.
>
> > Immediately following the above insert a section "2.3
> Methods" and add the
> > following text:
> >
> > "Test methods are not applicable to a Technical Report."
>
> OK.
>
> > Leave the final two paragraphs in the current section 2
> related to testing
> > profiles and locales as paragraphs 2 and 3 in this new section 2.3.
>
> OK.
>
> > Rename section 4 to Terminology" and renumber it section 3.
>  Add a new
> > section, "3.1 Conventions".  In this section describe the
> specific editorial
> > and typographical conventions used in the document,
> including any specific
> > fonts used such as in section 7.  Add new sections 3.2
> "Definitions", 3.2.1
> > "Terms", and 3.2.2 "Acronyms and Abbreviations".  Renumber
> the various terms
> > 3.2.1.x and acronyms and abbreviations 3.2.2.x as appropriate.  Any
> > definitions taken from other documents should include a
> reference to the
> > originating document.  For example, ISO/IEC 14252: 1995
> defines the term
> > "locale(s)", therefore this document should use the same
> definition of
> > locale(s) and include the reference "(ISO/IEC 14252: 1995)"
> at the end of
> > the definition.
>
> This is not ISO style. I am strictly following ISO writing directives
> here and the text is fully in accordance with that.
>
> > On page 10 remove section 6.5 and the editorial note
> following and renumber
> > all subsequent sections and related cross-references.  Is
> the correct title
> > for section 6.4 the one used in 6.4 or the one used in 6.5?
>
> OK. I liked the 6.5 title better.
>
> > Please provide access to Annexes A, B, F, and G via the
> iso14766 web page.
> > It would be useful to be able to piece together a complete document
> > including these annexes.
>
> OK, but that would not be part of the ballotted text, and will only
> be available later.
>
> > Additional comments will follow.
> >
> > Dave
> --
> D. J. Blackwood, Chair
> Canadian POSIX Working Group
>
>

